Life was full of stripes
but we were all just solid
and we did things when you told us to---
because that made sense
and because it was easy to do it
on cue---
ten times out of nine
you were right with a white lie
and I liked to sit in your back pocket
with my lemniscate
and my false positives
and my blind eye
and my black eye
all giddy and green with envy
while I sit there and say---
reply hazy, try again
nice theme, I would lose the "on cue" line because it's a little too obvious, just my opinion. Perhaps figure out a subtler way of including it, like "curly cue" or cuticles or something. The last line is great! Love it, and it definitely immediately conjures images in my mind. This is almost a generational piece.
ReplyDeleteI have a magic 8-Ball that will give you similar results, although right now it is indeed hazy!!!!!
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